写作原文

　　①As is vividly betrayed in the cartoon, a juvenile, with great efforts, is pushing a clock hand fordward（拼写错误，改为forward）， becase（拼写错误，改为because） he is curious about his futre, （拼写错误，改为future;逗号改为句号） an（改为An） old man, however, is doing his utmost to push the clock hand backward, because he wants to retrospect his old days. ②Apparantly（拼写错误，改为Apparently）， what they do is ultimately futile.①Simple as the picture is, its symbolic meaning subtly conveyed（前面加which，构成定语从句，修饰symbolic meaning;conveyed时态使用错误。因此，可改为which subtly conveys） is profound and thought-provoking. ②There is little dispute that time is a sovereign gift for all peple（拼写错误，改为people） and no one is expected to manipulate or speed up it （speed up为动副结构，修饰代词时，代词放中间；可改为speed it up）。 ③So, attempting a life （加is,构成be filled with）filled with no regrets, one should employ his time well, otherwise, a humilating（拼写错误，改为humiliating） future will be not far away from us. ④In addition, the old saying:“Time and tide wait for no man” also highlights the magnitude of cherishing time. ⑤Therefore, what we are supposed to do everyday is to make use of every chance to do useful things.①As far as I'm concerned, time invariably treats everyone equally. ②One can become informed and wise by treasuring time. ③Mo Yan, for example, who cherishes every minutes（every+名词单数，将minutes改为minute） to think and contemplate （句子缺成分，加“， and he”）has achieved great success in his works. ④Hence let's keep the aphorism in mind forever, that is:“A young idler , （标点使用有误，英语中，每个标点符号后面应该空一个字符，然后再继续书写单词）an old beggar”。

　　原作点评：

　　第一段描述图画的内容，应注意拼写问题。第二段揭示图画的寓意，深入探讨珍惜时间的重要性；第①句注意时态的正确使用；第②句注意单词拼写及动副结构的使用。第三段通过举名人的例子及格言“少壮不努力，老大徒伤悲”，点明文章主题。总体点评文章亮点：文章结构完整，每个段落的功能基本得以体现。文章错误：①语法错误：文章出现了少量的语法错误，比如时态一致性问题；every+名词单数等。②拼写问题：单词拼写错误情况较为严重，望细心改正。

　　修改意见：

　　文章整体构思、用词还不错，但是单词拼写加油，祝你考研成功！！错误较多。希望作者在以后的写作中，避免这一问题的发生。同时要注意在复习过程中，留意一些基本的语法点，减少作文中的错误。可以结合英语写作范文，积累更多的词汇和句子，为作文添彩。